Idea for a story. Mind to look over it for me?

[meowbark]

So over the past year or so I've been developing a storyline. Including characters, a plot, location, and the works.

I wanted to post my idea here to see if it's any good. I haven't told much people about it though.

So anyway, it's about another planet [Have yet to come up with a name for it] where Humanoid Animals [Heavily Evolved in other words] inhabit it, being more technologically advanced than us, they have been studying the Milky Way hoping to find traces of life, because they live in the Galaxy closest to our Galaxy.

Having been known about Earth for several years already, they have hacked into our satellites and have monitored our weather patterns, to see what type of weather we get. And eventually got close enough to observe everyday life.

[This part may sound stupid to some people]

In one of the labs around midnight, everyone else had already left for home. Aside one cat, given the codename C-32. Had stayed a little late for more research, because she had gotten so far in her studies about earth. Her helper robot, [A robot they tried to program to act like a human, that runs solely on AI. Failed, so turned into a Lab helper.] was sorting the data on the computers, and accidentally short-circuited, triggering a inactive project that the Scientist had been working on as a transporter. Whatever the Android did, got the Transporter working. The cat approached the transporter, in excitement. She started documenting what she was observing, though the force pulled them into the transporter, and did what it was built to do. They landed in a small neighborhood in Atlanta, GA. Unable to get back, not having developed the transporter that far.

On earth it was about 7 am, the young girl who lived in the house, getting ready to leave for school, heard the crash outside and goes to see what happened. Her brother follows, and they come upon the two 'Aliens'

Does it sound good so far? This is only the beginning, and I'm still developing the characters.

The High School girl, named Andrea, 16 years old, African American. Not like most girls [Well, African American wise] She's a tomboy.

Her brother, Shaun, is basically like any boy his age. He is only 14 though.

Andrea's friend, Natalie, gets involved, though she is more Goth. Not White make-up screamer type either. Doesn't care about school as much as Andrea.

The cat, C-32, later nicknamed Katrina by Andrea. Is a high intelligent 'Alien', she can speak English, and could even cure cancer for all we know.

The Android, who is nicknamed Sydna by Natalie, does as it's programmed. Though over time Katrina programs Sydna with more AI as she gets to know more about earth.

Sound somewhat decent?

[Medicham12]

It sounds really good

[meowbark]

It's a stupid idea and plot to me but thanks ^^

What part of Florida be you in?

[Admin]

Sounds like it is full of potential! I like the premise of the story and the setup. How far you with actual story writing?

[meowbark]

Well I am just setting up the storyline and all. I have to figure out some stuff that keeps this story still somewhat 'sane' or 'down the earth'. Because how would you feel or REACT if you saw a humanoid cat walking down the street? I know some people would freak out, some would be "DAAAW COOL" and the serious would call the Authorities.

And I have to figure out how I am going to work this plot out such as how it's going to go from after the crash. I probably can get some help from my teacher because she has seen a few other stories I have made before and said I'm a better writer then most students.

And I have heard that most writers work out the end of the story before anything so they know how to end it instead of throwing together a crappy ending (Example being the Sopranos)

So yeah, if at all I might be lucky enough to get the story published! Even if just a magazine that would be cool!